Weakness #4. The writer refers to "the readers" thus making it a weakness #4.
1.) The description of the building and the escalators creates a mood of apprehension for the readers.
Weakness #9. The writer uses this w/o a noun before or after it.
2.) This is basically the idea that time cannot be changed, it is as set-in-stone as a mountain range is. To the Tralfamadorians, time is one big line, made up of various moments.
Weakness #2. The writer uses an extraordinarily long quote.
3.) "They were the free standing kind: a pair of integral signs swooping upward between the two floors they served without struts or piers to bear any intermediate weight" and he tells us that "On sunny days like this one, a temporary, steeper escalator of daylight, formed by intersections of the lobby's towering volumes of marble and glass, met the real escalators just above their middle point, spreading into a needly area of shine where it fell against their brushed-steel side-pannels, and adding long glossy highlights to each of the black rubber handrails"
Weakness #3. The description is somewhat vague.
4.) His connotation diction is picturesque and suggestive of the lobby's highlighs and what he views as he walks through the building.
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